Dear Ms Gan,
My name is Tang Kak Yong and I am writing to share more about myself to you. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic with a diploma in Civil Engineering with Business. Being in the outdoors and learning through hands-on activities have always been enjoyable to me and civil engineering allows me to do both as I’ll be working onsite where all the action is.
My weakness lies in my inability to express myself in words due to my lack of vocabulary and poor usage of grammar. I have always struggled with the English language as I grew up in a mandarin speaking household. In Secondary school, I barely passed my English exams and only realised the importance of it during my GCE O- levels, where I had to stay back for countless of English remedials to improve my grades.
My strength lies in oral communication as I am confident in public speaking and I can express myself to my peers well. This skill set was acquired through my time spent in the police force during my National Service. I served as a Neighbourhood Police Centre Officer (NPCO) and was exposed to many situations where I was constantly put in a position to speak to the public, news reporters and criminals that were uncooperative. I observed the way my superiors spoke to difficult complainants and got them to cooperate with ease through communication. Being in that environment provided me with ample opportunities to practice and improve my ability to effectively communicate with people from diverse background.
For this module, I want to improve my writing skills especially in email writing as it is the most essential tool for communicating in the working society. Being able to deliver clear messages to my receiver will improve efficiency during work.
All in all, I know that language is all about practice and I will do my part to show enthusiasm and effort to learn.
Best regards,
Tang Kak Yong
CVE1281(Group 2)
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Dear Kak Yong,
I’m glad that your enjoyment of the outdoors has led you to the pursuit of CVE. I’m sure you will have fun and enjoy your learning in SIT.
You actually write well and your letter reflects no glaring grammatical errors. There are however, a thing or two you should take note of. Words choices can be bettered – e.g “my strength is in…/my weakness is…” can be better phrased to say, “my weakness/strength lies in…” In addition, try to avoid the use of the past perfect tense – e.g “had provide me” can be better rephrased as, “provided me with ample…”
Best,
Gan Sujia
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Dear Kak Yong,
I’m sure by now you have improved greatly after so much laughter and fun. Mostly Hong Xiang laughing at your grammar and vocabulary. However, we were successful in creating a fun and casual learning environment. It did worked really well for us.
You’re the leader and the pillar of our project team and your confidence is strong which we all benefited.
Look forward to more projects with you.
Regards,
Alvin
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Hi Kak Yong,
This self-introductory letter was well written. Your tenses and subject-verb agreement is good as well. I believe that your writing skill has improved but still has a room for further improvement. I hope you had fun with us during this module.
Best Regards,
Nicole
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Dear Kak Yong,
I really enjoyed your group’s presentation and feel that you presented really well. Your natural confidence in public speaking is something that I would hope to emulate. Overall, your self-introductory letter is very well-written.
A point to take note for your self-introduction letter:
1) “Being in the outdoors and learning through hands-on activities have always been enjoyable to me and civil engineering allows me to do both as I’ll be working onsite where all the action is”. The sentence might be long and you might want to break it.
Regards,
Syamim
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Hello Kak yong,
Your self – introduction was beautifully written and I did not see any faults in it. I hope you managed to learn valuable lessons through this module. Similar to you, I enjoyed doing outdoor activities and maybe one day we could do it together.
Cheers,
Hairul
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Hi Kak Yong,
I hope you don’t take my “mockery” too seriously :D. You come across as warm and passionate, it even reflects in your letter. You are always ready to assist others in need. Although you have poor foundations in the English language, I feel that you have put in a lot of effort to improve it. You repeatedly ask for peers to review your writings and welcome all sorts of criticism. I am sure this attitude towards learning will definitely give you results. I think there is still room for improvement on your choice of words and sentence structuring, otherwise a nicely written letter. Cheers.
Best regards,
Hong Xiang
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Hi Kak Yong,
That was a really good letter. I could find little issues with it. It was interesting to find out you were in the police. Try to call them suspects, not criminals, innocent until proven guilty after all. Beside that I think you are definitely in the right path to find what you are looking for.
All the Best
Jerr
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